7 thoughts on “Friday Flash 55 #18

  • “he wanted to reach out to her”… very powerful story telling or should I say showing. Nice job!

    The change in perspective from Tracy to Kyle was also nice to read.

  • Yes, I like this, just like DS said. Changing the perspective was nice. 🙂

  • Hey! You quoted me! I’ve never been quoted for something that I wrote originally. 🙂 Thank you…

  • I agree, the change in perspective is good and really rounds out the story nicely. Since I always do these slash and burn things, what do you think about omitting the final sentence? Your preceding sentences have already shown us that, so I’m not sure you need to tell us as well.

    Good story!

  • So…it wasn’t my intention to add this to the story. I just wanted to flash 55 from Kyle’s perspective. Do you think I should add it to the story? I didn’t know if the shift in POV would fit the ‘short story’format??
    What do you think?

  • Good from Kyles perspective. Maybe too much for the end of the story? Another idea is to cut out sentence 4 and leave the last one.

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